Blog 26: EoS III

Step One:

1a. The point of the introduction paragraph should be to gain the readers attention and engage them in the paper. Also, give them a sense as to what the paper will be about.
2a. The show introduction should give the reader a good idea about the show itself, its characters and their general interactions with each other.
3a. Scene 1
4a. The point of the first analysis paragraph is to show how the scene depicts Mynor's acts as unlawful.
5a. Scene 2
6a. The point of the second analysis paragraph is to show how Sierra isn't able to consciously make her own decisions and that Hearn is taking advantage of her.
7a. The writers of Dollhouse use the many instances of the rich using the Dolls to fulfill there fantasies to argue that human trafficking is morally wrong because they are using an unknowing human being to perform a deed they would not normally want to perform. A prime example of this is the drug mules in Colombia being used to smuggle cocaine and other illegal substances into the United States to make money for drug lords.
8a. The point of the SSI introduction paragraph is to set up your scholarly sources and introduce the articles a little bit.
9a. The next paragraph should give background of the first source's author then analyze his work.
10a. This paragraph should give background of the second source's author then analyze their work.
11a. This paragraph should provide proof that my sources are scholarly and a real world application.
12a. The first conclusion paragraph should transition back to your topic by giving the reader information on that topic.
13a. Scene 3
14a. The final paragraph sums up everything in your paper and leaves the reader with a succinct finality to your paper.

Step Two:

1b. My introduction paragraph catches the attention of the reader and introduces my topic.
2b. My show introduction gives a good outline of the shows plot and characters.
3b. Scene 1
4b. The analysis paragraph discusses how Mynor's actions were an example of human trafficking and therefore illegal.
5b. Scene 2
6b. The analysis paragraph depicts how Sierra is vulnerable to the advances of Joe Hearn and how he is wrong about making those advances.
7b. In the implications paragraph I state the argument and the real world application.
8b. I introduce the authors and their articles
9b. For the first author I give background of him as a professional and scholar and then analyze his work.
10b. Same as 9b.
11b. I give examples of the authors firsthand accounts and a real-world example about the Colombian drug traffickers.
12b. In my first conclusion paragraph I bring the reader back to the topic of human trafficking with ideas that the reader can relate to.
13b. Scene 3
14b. My final conclusion paragraph leaves the reader with an idea of what it is like for victims and that there is much work to be done.

Step Three: (skip the sections I felt were done correctly)


4B. I should remove the ideas eluding towards human trafficking because I don't want to introduce that yet.
6B. Same as 4B.
7B. Pretty good but I could include a better real world connection.
13B. Good rendering of the scene but the scene itself may be a little weak.
14B. Could be better with more description and connections.