Blog 30: EoS III: 17

 1a.) The first scene is where Joel Mynor has hired Echo, an Active from the Dollhouse. She is imprinted to be Joel’s wife, to show up at their newly bought house. Mynor stands on his lawn as bodyguards inspect the property he is preparing to show off to his wife. Paul Ballard knocks out some bodyguards then sneaks in the back door of the residence where the couple can be over heard flirting in the kitchen. He then confronts them in the kitchen, as Joel and Echo are about to open champagne. Paul is surprised upon seeing Echo close the refrigerator door. Mynor and his wife are inquisitive of Ballard. They both ask who he is and what he is doing here. “Tell me your name,” Mynor demands. Another of the guards subdues Ballard with a Taser and as he tries to take him away Paul elbows him and knocks him out. Several other men attack Ballard and he defeats them all. Echo’s handler, Boyd Langton, takes her away for a “treatment.” Ballard and Mynor sit at the kitchen and table to discuss how and why he would do such a thing. Mynor’s initial reasons sound noble and he had heartfelt intentions to impress his actually deceased wife. He says that, “I finally had money and could buy a house that Rebecca would love.” At the end of the conversation Ballard asks Mynor if he was going to use Echo for sex. Mynor responded with a wry smile on his face, “well it is a fantasy." 

1b.) All the highlighted words are in the past tense and should be changed to present tense. Doing this will cause me to have to change around the wording of some sentences in order for it to still makes sense.

2a.) Scene two starts with Sierra and several other Dolls walking down a hallway towards their living quarters. Sierra seems a little more distracted than the rest of the Actives in this area. When the rest of the Dolls are out of sight Sierra walks up to a glass wall and a panel slides back revealing a room. She enters, the panel slides back and another silhouette walks up to join her on the other side of the wall. The unknown man asks Sierra, “Do you trust me?” She responds, “with my life.” It is then revealed that the man is Joe Hearn, Sierra’s handler. Hearn asks Sierra, “do you want to play the game?” Sierra responds with a simple, “No.” Hearn says in an urging tone, “But you do remember to be quiet during the game don’t you?” Sierra responds tentatively with, “noise is upsetting.” The scene cuts to the other side of the glass and it shows Hearn’s silhouette removing his jacket.

2b.) The highlighted words are again in the past tense and need to be altered to be in the present. These sentences will be a bit more difficult to change and make work in the paragraph.