In Class Blog: Topic Sentences

Step One:
1a. Have you ever had a job you hated? 
1b. Humans were not created to be used by others without personal gain and in today’s world that such thing happens all the time.  

2a.  Dollhouse is a spooky psychological thriller. 
2b. Along the way Paul is assisted by numerous people including Actives and impeded by many difficult tasks and adversaries as well.  

3a. The first scene is where Joel Mynor has hired Echo, imprinted to be Joel’s wife, to show up at their newly bought house.
3b. Mynor responded with a wry smile on his face, “well it is a fantasy.”    

4a. This scene shows a very distinct case of human trafficking. Joel Mynor pays a huge sum of money in order for an unknowing person to come to his house and fulfill his fantasy. 
4b. Also, the fact that Boyd Langton also pulled Echo out of the situation cautioning that she needs a treatment also lends one to believe that the Dollhouse’s activities are anything but lawful.  

5a. Scene two starts with Sierra and several other Dolls walking down a hallway towards their living quarters.  
5b. As he removes his jacket for what seems apparent is sex, a man punches him through the window.

6a. This scene shows how individuals involved in human trafficking and sex trafficking are sometimes too scared of the possible consequences of speaking up either to the person advancing on them or to someone else and seek help.    
6b. The man who punched Joe Hearn was the only one that knew the right choice in that situation and he made it in order to keep Sierra from being anymore emotionally damaged.  

7a. The writers of Dollhouse use the many instances of people using Dolls to fulfill their fantasies to argue that, since the Dolls can’t make decisions for themselves, those people imposing their wills upon the Dolls are morally wrong because they are using another unknowing human for their own personal pleasure.  
7b. While people may acknowledge that this happens, they do little as a whole to try and prevent it.  

8a. Human trafficking is the unlawful trade of human beings mainly for the purposes of commercial sexual exploitation or forced labor and as aforementioned human trafficking is one of the many atrocities that occur in todays world that affects an estimated 9.5 million people all around the globe.  
8b. This article focuses a little more on the sex trafficking aspect and how in someway everyone around the world is affected by it.  

9a. David A. Feingold is an accredited anthropologist and filmmaker that has seen the horrible truths of human trafficking firsthand.  
9b. Feingold expresses his concern by saying, “Sending victims home may simply place them back in the same conditions that endangered them in the first place…”(30).  

10a. Ruth Dearnley and Steve Chalke are the CEO of Stop the Traffik and founder of Stop the Traffik respectively.  
10b. This gives the hard realization that forced labor and sometimes slavery of sorts is still a very real occurrence and human trafficking is a large part of how these acts are being supplied with humans to perform the jobs.

11a. Dr. Feingold has numerous firsthand accounts of human trafficking from his time spent abroad in regions like Southeast Asia.  
11b. If a mule is discovered or the drugs happens to kill them, the drug lords have no problem finding another impoverished and willing civilian to use to smuggle the drugs just so that person can make some money for their families.  

12a. Human trafficking is a large part of how our world is run.  
12b. The rich can do this because they have such a heavy influence and there is such an ample amount of people who are in desperate need for money or medical care for their family that they have no choice but to fall susceptible to the pipe dream of easy money promised by the drug lord or trafficker.  

13a. The final scene takes place in a forest. Echo is on an adventure sports date with a tall, athletically built young man.  
13b. This is often how the rich view the people that are being trafficked, as inhuman or replaceable objects.  

14a. When a person falls victim to human trafficking they almost always lose everything; their home, their family, and most definitely their old life as it was before.  
14b. It isn’t an easy fix however, it takes lots of work and that starts with getting people informed.  

Section Two:

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